Out of curiosity, what does my mother have to do with my writing? And why would that offend her?

Shakespeare wrote 'brevity is the soul of wit'. Most of your comments are about the fact that my sentences are too long and 'over-stuffed'-arguably, you could also have made that point in one comment and one sentence.

I'm happy that you took the time to point out some things I should improve on but the 'mother' thing I find bizarre, I'm sorry.